tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245160260110720200.post5468918342878562207..comments2023-06-01T13:07:10.363-04:00Comments on The Bully Pulpit: In The ShadowsTom Shanahanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09671643507239783999noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245160260110720200.post-27684604213479203662010-04-23T13:19:28.044-04:002010-04-23T13:19:28.044-04:00Bill - Thanks for taking time to comment. I agree ...Bill - Thanks for taking time to comment. I agree with your analysis. That modifier is misplaced. The change you suggest would give that sentence the punch I suggested it required. Move it to the top of the speech rather than the bottom, and it could have been a very different speech.<br /><br />As for the teleprompter. Yes, he over-uses it to the point absurdity, and you and I are not the only ones who've made that observation. As I said in a previous post, it sometimes seems he wouldn't give his mailing address without benefit of a teleprompter.<br /><br />That said - he is still gifted at delivering what appears on the screen before him. There are people who could bore us to death even with an exciting speech in front of them. Delivery makes a difference.<br /><br />Thanks again for your comment! - TomTom Shanahanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09671643507239783999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245160260110720200.post-91552788961212838102010-04-23T12:59:31.429-04:002010-04-23T12:59:31.429-04:00Tom, that last sentence you cite is a good example...Tom, that last sentence you cite is a good example of misplacing the modifier "only" and thus weakening the thrust. It should have been: "In the end, our system works -- our markets are free -- ONLY when there are basic safeguards that prevent abuse..." BTW, I don't equate skill at reading a teleprompter with being great oratorically.Bill Dunnehttp://www.speechwriterspot.comnoreply@blogger.com